OK, OK... I decided to start writing again. I think God moved me to start re-writing my series, because I have never felt so energized about my writing than I feel right now. I had only written a chapter a year ago when I started this, and I just perfected that chapter. I will post it to see what you guys think of it. It might not make any sense because I have not made the rest of the book (my books are designed like J.K. Rowling's famous series, where the things that don't make any sense are perfected and straightened out later in the series.)

The series name is call "The Anomalies," like the thread name. It's a Science Fiction series placed years in the future where an evil and corrupt Genetics & Technologies company joins with a branch of the government to create specimen that can "perfect human flaws." They soon start experimenting on live humans, and create freakish mutants, until their methods perfect and they can make an actual mutant from a live human of any age. The government branch, called Project 'Alpha' (for now; I have to avoid any 'X' in the plot/story/book due to plagarism), soon turns on the UN, and starts to design an army of mutants, only when they make it, they can make a mutant without experimenting on humans. The plot becomes more interesting later in this book, which in turn makes the story quite addictive (for me).


A.D.


[Edit: Props to ZP for noticing my typos! Thanks!]
[Edit 2: Upon reading this chapter a few times, I do not blieve I finished it. Just a footnote reminder.]
[Edit 3: I have two pieces up there; the Intro explains a bit of the purpose of the series, the chapter I that is unfinished is an actual book.]
[Final Edit: I removed both pieces. Though I would love to have people reading it, the chapter that was up is no longer the finished product nor do I think will be too soon, and the 'intro' has been blended much better into the story. I thank all those who read them whilst I had them up.]

pretty good! just watch the typos.

I made a few edits to it, as listed on the post with the pages.

i'll give 'em a read when i get the chance. :) i promise to post my honest-to-goodness opinion.

Yes, thank you. By the time you get the chance to read it, hopefully it will be finished (the chapter in the book, I mean -- I am writing it right now) Thanks ;D

the only problem I have is this. By posting this on the internet can't just anyone print it out, make a few subtle changes, and claim it as thier own. Then one day if it's good enough (I haven't read it) get it published and make the money off of it.

Thanks SO much for the advice. I really needed a wake-up call, glad you reminded me of the threat. Just wish I could get an idea of the shape of things involving people's opinions - I mean, I wish I could trust someone enough to let them have a look.

personaly I think you should only let someone you realy trust have possesion of your work. Someone I would trust would be like, nobody, unless you submit it to a publisher. But I would find out what that involves in order to protect your writing. Writing is so personal, involved, and special. It takes talent to realy write something good and it's not worth the risk of it falling into the wrong hands... that's just my opinion and advice. You can take it or leave it. ;) ;) I'm just tryin to look out for ya.

Yeah, no problem. That's what I meant; I'll only send it to anyone I can really trust. I don't want my work stolen, because it has taken years to evolve it, but I don't want to deprive anyone or submit to my paranoia.

i haven't read your finished chapter, but i do have a few thoughts on what i did read.

are you gonna go back to Chris & Angela somewhere further down the story? you don't have to tell me how if you are planning that. i just thought that since introduce us so well to those two, it would be misleading to never come back to them. i mean, i wanna know what happens to them in more than as a sidenote! actually, having only read the unfinished chapter, i'm more attached to them than i am the Anomalies.

speaking of them, i don't understand a lot of what they talk about. Mode 4 G’s scientists, M4G&T, M4 MR-3’s, A-Code (yes, you explain it, but i'm still curious where the name A-Code comes from). now, you might explain some of this later on, but even so, for now, it seems to hinder the flow of the story. every time one of these pops up (which is pretty often), i stopped to think a little to try to gather what it meant.

also, some of your paragraphs are long. Victor Hugo may be ableo to get away with it in Les Miserables, but not so much a new writer. plus, even in Les Mis, it makes it a rather daunting task to read. even if all you do is break up the existing paragraphs, it makes things easier on the eye. kinda like on the internet when you read a post or an article, there is extra space between the paragraphs to make it easier to read. (i'm not saying you should do that, just make smaller paragraphs).

one more thing. when introducing the characters, they tend to blurr together. i forget what each is supposed to be able to do, simply because we are introduced to each of them one after the other. if you spread it out more, it'd be easier. maybe introduce us to Jon first, then have Radius interrupt Jon's train of thought and intro him. then continue with the retorts between Golem and Radius and intro us to Golem when he jumps on Radius. you get the picture? it's easier to form a picture of who goes with what ability and their backgrounds if we see a little bit of who they are and how they act first.

other than that, it looks good. :) intriguing. i wouldn't say it's excellent, right up there with Michael Chritchon or Isaac Asimov, but it's got a lot of promise. :) a lot! :D

regarding writing in general disciple; are you going or planning to go to college and take some writing courses. Sounds like you have the imagination it takes for story telling. If I had that talent I would definately consider writing courses.

Wow... that is a compliment. Crichton's a genious. Thank you SO much... I am blushing right now actually!

Thanks for the paragraph tip. I'll put into play, in fact :)

And that is why I decided I have to put off the Anomalies. The Intro was just an introductory thought, so that if one I REALLY trust is reading it, and they hear those words (M4G&T, etc.) they can look back at it.

I have to put off the Anomaly 4 because of the great detail I want to put into them. I have noticed that with each book I write I tend to add more and more detail... you should read the complete Chapter. This is why I have to put off the detail into the actual situation... I don't want these characters to just plop fall into your lap. I want to carefully introduce the mad scientists, as I call them.

The entire scenario with Golem and Radius was already in plans to re-write... I write ahead to keep an idea and guidline intact.

I'll explain the A-Code right here. The design of each and every mutant is unique, type by type, so they had to design the project names to go along with the experiment. They planned ahead (actually, the head scientist did... don't worry, they all will be introduced in this book... or at least most...) and said that the escaping ones would be called Anomalies.

The name A-Code, as you may have gathered, is "Anomaly Code." The A-Code became the basis name for each mutant, but the mutants themselves, once conscious/intelligent enough, name themselves. The rogue ones, the A-4 for example, name themselves to set themselves apart from the rest of the impending future designs, whether more or less unique... the A-Codes for all the future experiments were then given numbers instead, as the dictionary doesn't have enough words for each and every mutant... only the truly unique and singled out experiments deserve such names.

I hope this helps out! God bless!

regarding writing in general disciple; are you going or planning to go to college and take some writing courses. Sounds like you have the imagination it takes for story telling. If I had that talent I would definately consider writing courses.
Why wouldn't I? ;D I have always dreamt of getting a degree in writing due to my imaginative and literary skills. The one thing I have been good at since I was a child: coming up with amazing, in depth stories -- literally. When I was back in elementary school as a child, the only school I've been to, I used to captivate people with my stories... shutting them in because my stepmother started to dislike my imagination only made it increase until it couldn't be just kept inside. Every single opportunity I got to tell an imaginative situation, I took it and told away... I looked stupid, but hey, aren't all imaginative writers a wee bit crazy? ;)

... and I'm glad this thread has gone somewhere faster than I expected -- I expected WEEKS to pass before it would get as far as it has gone now. Thanks for all the pointers and spell-checkings and grammar help -- I really appreciate it. The compliments, the criticism, everything. I've posted the difference between the original chaper one and the paragraph-fixed one. Yep, I fixed the lengthy paragraphs.

I'd love to post more detail on how my book unfolds, but I am sincerely afraid that if I unveil my methods of writing, I stand to have my writing stolen, so I definitely, as I have said, won't post any more chapters, but most of all, I won't be able to post detail about how this book will unfold and reveal its true colors. I'd love to share this story with everyone, but I can't throw caution out the window.

Usually no one asks about my writing, they just don't mention it and hope that I'll ignore/forget about it. I appreciate the posts! ;D God bless!


A.D.

no problem. :) i'm aiming at being a journalist. mostly to get my writing skills up there. i want to write books eventually. but either way, God's given me the analytical ability and skills (albeit, not excellent, but good) of a writer. so i'm actually a pretty decent copy editor. which is why i'm gonna do that for the school newspaper next semester of college (was on the paper the last two semesters as well). so any help i can give, i will. :)

Any help's appreciated... I don't know a THING about getting my SciFi published, so ANY help is appreciated :P lol. I don't think I'm any good either, but I know I am good enough to at least get read. I've just been glancing over publishers, just as a back-up. But I don't know a thing about it, and I'm WAY too afraid to ask my dad about it... he doesn't need any more stress at his age. I have NO clue how getting published works other than sending in a copy of something and getting rejected :P.

But thank you for helping. I loved the compliments ;D I'm still not as good as Hubbard, but hey, he's just got a degree in everything ::]

never read any of his stuff. i don't like the guy due to Scientology, so i stay away from his books. :P

and my comment about Crichton earlier, i meant it. he's still better, but you could be at his level. :) altho, even some of his books stink like a swamp. :P

Yeah, 'cause he's better. I loved JP and LW was just as good. Yeah, some of his stuff does vacuum my floors :P

Hubbard's good only in detail.... man, is Battlefield Earth LONG!

But thank you for your compliments ;D well appreciated. God bless!


A.D.


P.S. I WISH I were at his level :P

keep it up D. It's a wonderful talent. My son has an awesome imagination. When he was in first grade he won a school wide writing contest. But he is so lazy, I am realy at a loss as to how to motivate him. I know if he would just apply himself he could realy do something with writing or comedy.

There isn't much one can do to inspire a writer, other then to pray for him. I just suddenly woke up a couple days ago and started writing, that's it. I felt led to do it, like nothing could stop me from writing (nothing can stop me from writing, but publishing's a different subject :P). I could never be a comedian - I know some people say I'm funny, but it takes real talent to be good at it.

Thank you for the encouragement... I might take a break today. I feel like if I wrote today, it would only be half as good as I have been writing, and besides that, when I take a break, I pick up on some details that I might have missed. God bless!


A.D.

Actually, since Saturday, I have been on Writer's break, and I have been inspired to make this book thicker in detail and situations. I really wish I could give my chapters away to some trustworthy people, some people who actualy ARE interested in Science Fiction, because I know that most of the trustworthy people I know don't like SciFi or reading much at all... lol :P Tells you who I trust most.

I have added some action in my head, so when I type it out, I will NEED an opinion as to any flaws, because action wasn't a good forte for me in the past.

Also, when I felt the Holy Spirit in me yesterday (July 4th) I was inspired to make each story worthy of philosophy. Let me explain: you know how most stories have the "moral of the story"? Mine will too. I won't water it down, no, in fact doing this has spiced up the story.

Each story has a Christian meaning bhind it now: I won't tell you how they link with the stories, but I will tell you the morals... and not the stories they belong to (I love suspence): Christian freedom, resisting temptation and being strong in weakness (essentially bringing Satan down), and persecution & divisons. Heh heh, makes in intersting, no? It makes me curious how the stories will turn out. I will also drop hints of God in them... does that sound like an idea? I won't make it obvious, like Skillet does; they make sure the message is seen, but not to the extent that it turns them away.

I am curious how this story will turn out. I'll say again; this book is not just the story of Christopher and Angela, it has two other mystery combinations. I won't even post 'em, or hint them. The next book will be the remaining meeting. THAT is being cautious, not paranoid. I have already said enough. I hope to get back to writing tomorrow. Pray for me that things might work out. Pray that I will know WHEN to get a publisher, and pray that I have the strength and courage to get one... getting myself up there will be most difficult.

Thank you all for looking out for me and complimenting me, and God bless!


A.D.

as for putting forth your moral in the story and making that Christian ideology, awesome! i love books that manage to do that without being preachy (Wrinkle in Time series, Chronicles of Narnia...). are you gonna go more the route of Narnia and tell "Bible stories" in a new way or Wrinkle and just have Christian themes and symbolism woven into the story?

personally, i like both but love the latter way better simply because it makes things less obvious. in some ways people might see that as bad, but i don't think so. it's still there and obvious enough to those that are either looking for it or have eyes to see ("he who has ears, let him hear" said Jesus). the Chronicles way can be too obvious to some so they ignore it all-together.

It's the latter. One story, possibly the last one in the book, is going to be DEFINITELY unlike Bible stories, but there is going to be symbolic "strength in weakness" where the main charcter isn't as overly special, but in his/her (still being cryptic) charcter will overly make up for the lack in speciality, making the character my favorite. But it will be woven into the story. It won't be as obvious at all, unless you are a Christian, of course. ;D

The Christian ideology won't be obvious, especially in the part I am writing now. Thanks for the support! I couldn't POSSIBLY write today because I can't seem to make sense without extreme concentration like right now... I am concentrating so hard I can feel ?? in my head. I will obviously have to stall another day... too much stress and confusion. It's like I'm being tested, but it's becoming a test in EVERYTHING I do now. I wish I didn't have to be tested this badly this constantly. Pray for me, and thank you again! God bless!

An update:
It has been a week since I last wrote in this novel. I haven' given up, no, rather I just get busy with everything getting shoved in my face suddenly :P lol. I look forward to continuing; perhaps tomorrow - no promises, though. I hope tomorrow won't be so aggrivating. Thanks for your support and for any prayer.

I came up with an addiction to this book, a whole new story, but I forgot it. Pray I'll remember again, because it sounded very interesting, and the ideology was "Redemption" I do believe... I almost remember. God bless!


A.D.


[Edit:]
P.S., Another Update:

I started writing again today. I made the story a bit more flavored, it hasn't reached the ideology yet. It's only the second chapter :P. But I finished chapter II, and it looks impressive when I look at the print preview of it. It's eight pages long :o but the last one is only like a paragraph long ::]. I'm lovin' the story, and I'm gonna go start writing chapter three! Peace out!

Well, I started writing chapter III, and I wrote like a whole page of stupidity, so I erased everything except for the first paragraph, which was decent. I decided I'll have to do things differently, now I'm just waiting for the day I can start writing again. I feel WAY too braindead today to write, and I really want to keep writing (I wish I could write every day) but fr some reason my brain doesn't have the same capabilities as I wished it had ::] If my brain could work well every day, I'd be reaching the ideology already. Sounds like I have a long way to go, but I'm still optimistic. Feel free to post any pointers (I already know that staying up late is counter-productive ::]) and God bless!


A.D.

I am writing again today (it might just be that I have to write only of Fridays/weekends).

I was going to ask what I should do about my writer's block. I spent weeks tossing and turning about what I should do, as this section of this book I am writing is going to come out terribly short. I was gonna poll some opinions, if you will. But I awoke this morning with a grand idea.

I'll keep the first version of Chapter III, but start a whole new Version 2. As V.1 was not in my original plans, I won't continue it until need be. If I write the rest of this section and it's at least 25 pages total (or thereabouts) I'll be satisfied and I'll move onto section two, the next story.

I didn't have V.1 in my original plans because I thought this story would turn out long enough (as my Knells series ended up doubling what I expected page-wise). But after the first two chapters added up to 10 pages (or thereabouts) I tried adding onto the story as I did with Knells. But it didn't work, I hit a month-long writer's block. So I am sticking with the original plan, as I can always go over the book again (yes, I finally realized that this is not the finished product. ::])

This Chapter is going to be easy, as the rest of the book will (if things turn out as long as I want, which should be a book toaling in at least 100+ pages.) Pray that things will work out for me, though, and that it'll be a satisfactory book. I am jumping right into the ideology as we speak... I am hoping this book will please a publisher out there.


-A.D.

as boring as this sounds, a good way to break writer's block (that i've found) is to just write. start writing out what ideas you have. even if they are lame, seeing them on paper can help to formulate them into something better, or more substantial.

my journalism teachers says "there's no such thing as writer's block" to say that we are the only thing keeping ourselves from writing. she's right, in a weird kind of way. just write. i know it's not exactly fun when you don't want to write something that's not good, but just write to get all the junk out so the good analogies and stuff can flow.

I know... I am the one in the way of me writing most of the time ::]

But that time was because I couldn't write anything... at all. All I could do is reply to what people on here asked me, etc. I feel like that a bit right now. To start writing again would take decisiveness, a quality I DO NOT have. ::]

Right now the story is taking a turn. It's about to reach that happiness. I enjoy writing this. Mainly because it is the happiness I haven't experienced before. The fact that I can write this better than everything else surprises me. It isn't an emotion I have felt before, which makes me a bit more confident in my imagination's abilities. I can't wait for the plot! hehe

Playing a video game inspired me a bit today. I was playing Zelda 64 and Goron City pulled a string in my mind that triggered a daydream that will be added into Section II of this book. :)

This is probably a dumb thing to say, but if my books ever became a movie I'd want the music/theme to be like '[Opening]' by Mike Shinoda of Linkin Park :> (just because it's beautiful and kinda is fitting...)

In Chapter II V.2, I have written nearly five pages :o I was shocked when I looked, because I thought it was way shorter. It's so close to zero hour I can barely believe it. The plot thickens :azn:

I am going to wing a little bump in the story I added. I will have to study close the flow of events and whatever I happen to write I hope I can stick with. I was going to ask that whoever can help me with this trivia PM me, but I needn't waste time. It's not a big deal. Ooh, now that I think of it this chapter might end up being really short if I don't be careful. Better pull out my dusty, rusty detail skills. :azn: I used to be known for my detail back when I wrote Fantasy. Now I hope the same with Sci-Fi.

ya I read them and I like the 2nd one better.but u didn't describe them.when I read I see the whole thing. that's wot made lotr so much better in book form; i knew every chacter and could see wot they were going thru. so maybe when I get official u could email me the rest and maybe u'll have some description of Chris and Angela.ya cause i never have any original ideas and like to draw characters 4m my bro's book. and boy does he get mad!!*hehe*
but ya i love the 2nd one. the first i just didn't follow.
BarlowgIRL

Hehehe... and I'm sure you meant Angela, right?

... The first was just intended to see if people liked that better. It's just like a 'teaser trailer' for a movie.

... Yeah, they get explained better throughout the next two chapters, because it reeeeeally didn't matter to me, seeing how they were so young in Chapter I. I gave deeper explanations in Chapter II and I will give more explanation in Chapter III of what they look like at their *official* age.

yeah Angela.that's wot I said!!! look at the other post!

you changed it ::]


I have, so far, 20 pages total in this book (on Microsoft Word. How much does that add up to in an actual-sized book? If anyone knows, it would be AWESOME to know.) I am having a little trouble concentrating right now so writing is not a top priority. So now boredom is ::] I guess it's God's way of saying "Keep the Sabbath Holy" and "rest on the seventh day." And I intend on doing so (other than the dishes :D) all day. Maybe I'll play a video game or watch a movie. Seeing Jurassic Park two days in a row has given me an ounce of inspiration. ;D

pages in a book transferred from Word vary depending upon a couple of things. hardbacks tend to have space in between lines, larger text and generally take up more room on the page. paperbacks are smaller text, don't take up as much room on the page, but they can also vary depending upon the publisher and the curning (space between lines/letters) that they use.

probably best to ask someone who works in publishing.

Just wondered... I knew it varied, but I always hold a glimmer of hope that maybe I can get an easy answer. I've been raised to make sure that you know that there are no easy ways out of a situation. So, I guess it all comes down to talking with a publisher... hmmm... something I find I have been putting off. (All the stories of being turned down don't encourage me. It's especially that way with Science Fiction, I'd presume.)

Thank you, anyway, though. :)

no problem. :) working with a school newspaper gives me the knowledge of this stuff. plus working at a bookstore helps me see it worked out in the books, sorta.

glad i could help, well, kinda. ;)

haha!

You just gave me another reason to E-Mail a publisher, is all ::] I've been putting it off for a few reasons...

Like the idea of going into film work instead...

Like the idea of being rejected countlessly (as I am familiar with rejection, I know it wouldn't help - to put it lightly - to be rejected a lot)

Like, and this is the most logical reason, the thought of finishing or nearly completing this book before speaking with one...


Sounds like some reasons, or just some babble? :P

Well, I'm only on Chapter IV now, but I am dangerously close to writing the big plot twist. I have had tons of fun writing this. So far the book has to be between 25-30 MSWord pages long. Which is good. But I notice that Satan keeps trying to throw me off from writing my books by sending things my way. But God makes sure I don't get lost. It makes me think that maybe I am supposed to be a writer (as sometimes I get the idea that the competition is too fierce and that I wouldn't be a good writer).

I also added a little tidbit into it that just screams ideology. I'll spell it out: I.R.E.

OK, OK... I decided to start writing again. I think God moved me to start re-writing my series, because I have never felt so energized about my writing than I feel right now. I had only written a chapter a year ago when I started this, and I just perfected that chapter. I will post it to see what you guys think of it. It might not make any sense because I have not made the rest of the book (my books are designed like J.K. Rowling's famous series, where the things that don't make any sense are perfected and straightened out later in the series.)

The series name is call "The Anomalies," like the thread name. It's a Science Fiction series placed years in the future where an evil and corrupt Genetics & Technologies company joins with a branch of the government to create specimen that can "perfect human flaws." They soon start experimenting on live humans, and create freakish mutants, until their methods perfect and they can make an actual mutant from a live human of any age. The government branch, called Project X, soon turns on the UN, and starts to design an army of mutants, only when they make it, they can make a mutant without experimenting on humans. The plot becomes more interesting later in this book, which in turn makes the story quite addictive (for me).

Read it please and tell me what you think of both the story and my writing style. Please support me if you think it's good enough to make it out in the real world, as it would be great if I could get this published, because my family needs money too, as my dad is the only person working to support my family. No one has actually told me they liked my stuff, my friend and my sister sounded like COMPLETE liars when they said "it's pretty good." They just don't want to hurt my feelings, which I understand.

Also tell me if I suck, because I'd like to know so I won't have to post any more of my book. Read the first chapter of Culmination and enjoy. God bless,


A.D.


[Edit: Props to ZP for noticing my typos! Thanks!]
[Edit 2: Upon reading this chapter a few times, I do not blieve I finished it. Just a footnote reminder.]
[Edit 3: I have two pieces up there; the Intro explains a bit of the purpose of the series, the chapter I that is unfinished is an actual book.]

PRETTY GOOD I COULD NEVER DO THAT THOUGH.

Hahahaha, yeah, I never thought I could a long while ago, but stuff happens. Thanks.

Not that this thread gets a lot of action, but...

I edited the first two chapters of this book out of sheer will. I did well, so far the book is now 32 pages long on MSWord.

I also have plans to bulk up all of my writing. It will become a masterpiece all too soon... or, maybe not soon, but over time. ;D

But I have to stall this series and work on my Fantasy series (I also have some recommended reading to help before I get started) due to financial reasons. I am hoping this series does well, so please pray for me. I also have to find a publisher, so please pray for that.

[My Dad and I have been pondering the possibility of... a government grant?]

... Now that my Dad is getting us out of debt, I can resume writing The Anomalies if I so wish. Which I do. I have no experience writing the words involved in casting magic (that is, in using elemental energy) but I will figure it out as I go on with Culminations.

I am also sure that the inspiration I has months ago about a 'Section IV' is lost on me, BUT, I am also sure it blended into my stories.

I think the detail I plan to add to this Section, as well as additional events and emotions critical to making it a full plot, will cause the Section to be worthy of its own book, as it may be for each Section, as I am dying to add a lot mor detail. I know, I'll stop borin' ya and get on off to bed. I hope to write tomorrow.


G'night! :)

-Andrew or A.D. :P

it's good to see that you've been able to get back to the book you're passionate about. :) there are some things that just need to be written, that need to come out of you. i think "Anomalies" is one of those. :)

Thanks for the compliment. I think that I have been itching to get writing lately, it's a great way for me to spend my time, but I shouldn't be able to till Monday, I think. Unless I can squeeze it in while my Dad is at work and my sister is away, I will have to wait. I keep this in mind:

"All good things come to those who wait."

Oh, I finally got around to counting a more universal number for the length of my book. So far I have completed four chapters, I haven't fully pre-final-edited chapter four yet, but its length as of tonight is 25,519 words. I know, it's not much, but I think it's going well. :)

Okay, I'm nearly done with the first draft, which hasn't been neither been edited nor fleshed out, but here's how long it is as of my going to bed right now:

30,940 Words Long.


I know, not much, but it's too long to combine with two other books.

Okay, if Thalia's numbers are right (approx. 1250 words every 4-5 pages) then my book is around 100 pages so far. I think my original idea of making it a combination book and calling it Culminations might have been accurate. That means I'm not even close to finishing this book. *pouts* My avatar [old] says(/said) it all.

Hmmm... I wonder if I could post the (.jpg) title I made for one of my later books on here? I mean, I made it, it's cool, I just don't know if it'd technically be safe to post it up here.

Yes, I'm up at 2:40 in the morning, writing. Sounds a little foolish, but I can keep going for another ten minutes. My book is doing well, after all; I am this close *holds two fingers an inch apart* from finishing the first draft. I fill finish my first draft over the course of the next week, but I need to take some time to finish what I started tonight.

So far, this book just might end up a paparback. :D

One of my Dad's co-workers said he'd like to read it through when I'm done. I already caught someone's interest! ;D

I'm gonna have my stepmom proof-read it when I finish what I want to get done of this, and I'll deviate from there. :D


Anyway, my first book that I wrote, not including the "first chapter" (it wasn't a chapter, it was merely an unloading of the story upon your lap), was approkx. 380 pages. Or, 105,351 words. I spent approximately 100 hours on it; maybe more, maybe less. I'd call that blind devotion to an utterly uncomprehensible book.

Let's see what Book 2 was in length (I know it was supposedly longer at one point)...

Huh? It's shorter than the book I'm writing now and haven't even finished yet! 38,011 words! Approximately 140 pages!

I guess I just increased the font size and counted M.Word pages when I was younger. A long while ago, last year, maybe two years ago, I edited the first half because I had put a lot of 'bad' stuff in there, if you catch my drift. Obviously I cut out half of the stuff I put in there, because I didn't even have all of the M.Word pages I had counted before! YIKES!

I know this sounds silly... but... I really can't write today! It's like... Okay, examples are better at this point.

This is all I wrote so far today:

"When he woke up the next morning, he felt horrible."

That's it. That's all I could manage out! I can't seat to fit out any more words! There's nothin' up there in that empty head o' mine! :P

But seriously, it bugs me that I was anticipating writing, like I had the rest of this last chapter worked out in my head, up until I sat down in front of it. It all just fell out! Somehow I think it has to do with being tested... but I could be wrong! I am a kook like that, ya know. After being led to write this book, I have run into stumbling blocks and smokescreens set up by Satan. I can barely think now! Let alone type what I'm typing right now.

I ended that block! :D


While editing today, the very first line I read from the pages I must edit:

"Angela awoke and shot up, looking left and right as her head lay on her white pillow."

This is going to be a loooooong night... ::]

(For those who don't know, that sentence is contradictory; she can't be looking left and right with her head on the pillow if she shot up after she awoke! :P)

but it's so much easier in many ways editing your own stuff. you're so free to do whatever. it's harder editing someone else's stuff because you have to clean it up but also keep their voice. adding words, taking away too many or changing some can make it not their own. feel privileged that you don't have to deal with that. :)

I do. I'm just sayin' it's hard work :) ...

...that I should be doing right now! I only have 20 days! JEESH! Get to it!

cool very cool

Thank you.


I gave this explanation of the book to someone else:

'In the quaint town of Sunrise Valley, Minnesota, things couldn't
be any more normal. Chris and Angela Thomas felt stuck right in
the middle of it. Their parents, though strange to them, liked
to keep things normal like the city officials did. But then
suddenly the normalcy of Sunrise Valley was interrupted by the
world's changing events, and Chris and Angela were no exception.
After a strange incident at Angela's Middle School, she was no
longer the same, and she knew it. Her older brother, Chris, who
swore to her that it'd soon become clear, was puzzled himself as
to what had happened. All he knew was that the "oddly-tasting
drinks" that were served at the dance Angela went to were not
normal cups of soda. Angela had accounted being faster and smarter
than ever before after that event, something that Chris himself
was confused over.

'Over the years they attempted to bring their lives back to
normal, realizing that normalcy wasn't entirely a bad thing. But
as the world's events unfold, Chris and Angela once again find
themselves getting caught up in them, and soon they realize that,
no matter how remote Sunrise Valley is, they can't escape the evil
that will befall the world.'

Your book sounds like it will be amazing, you have a very creative mind and the talent to write. I hope you finish soon and get it copyrighted soon...I want to read it...! Of what I read it seems very original and slightly twisted...exactly what a sci-fi book should be.

*blush* Thank you. :)

I am quite pleased to hear that so many people would like to read it already. From the start I have worried about whether or not it was interesting enough to read, but now I know that it is not as easy to pass up as I thought. Though the name of this thread is passive (constructed mostly of a noun) which obviously is why people don't tend to drop by often, the name of this book will be much more engaging.

As is, this book just might be called "The Chronicle Experiment," but I have to check and see if the name is taken, then have my proofreader see if the name is appropriate.

But overall I am pleased to see he reader turnout so far... I can't wait until I finish!

But, of course, I have a couple road blocks: I am just now becoming ill, which will not help me at all, and I am under a time constraint to get it done in around 20 days. Also, when I wrote the book, I did nothing to connect the plot intro to the plot twist, something I am sure a couple people here understand is a big mistake, so I have to add to the story as I go.

I can't believe my old habit of dropping the plot onto the reader's lap came back! ::]

Yeah that could be a slight problem that should definately be worked out. Why do you have a time constraint?

My proofreader returns in December for three weeks or so.

In all honesty, my proofreader is my Mom, but because she is an expert. She used to proofread romance novels.

Anyways, she will be here in 20 days. I will allow a couple days while she is here for leeway, but not much. She will be busy while she is here, we are going Christmas shopping, and my baby sis will be here. so the only free time I have over the next 2 months is the next 18 or 19 days.

Well that sounds fun, yet extremely rushed, I hope you finish in time.

Pray-age:D

It is rushed, but I have been working on and off on this novel for a year or maybe more. I have done most the work within the last 3 months.


I, of course, am praying, and I hope that means you are too. ;)

(:PRefrigerator:P)

Definately

(:PRefrigerator:P)

(hehehe...)

Thank you...


And by the way, I looked back on my edited version of my very first chapter...

AND IT SUCKED.

God help me, I have a long ways to go.


I even forgot a period at the end of one of the sentences! JEESH!

Jeesh how dare you forget that period...

btw, like my sig:P

(Yes, it is very chique. ::] It is hilarious, I will add it to mine...)

What I mean is that in forgetting proper puntuation after editing it once, it shows I have made repeated mistakes.

I pray they don't happen anymore.

So...how's your story coming, you better finish it soon, or else. you're not allowed to be sick either:p. I gotta go for the weekend, I hope you feel better and I hope you can get lots done on your book.

So...how's your story coming, you better finish it soon, or else. you're not allowed to be sick either:p. I gotta go for the weekend, I hope you feel better and I hope you can get lots done on your book.
I'll see you then. :)

I'd love to get lots done, but my computer is being difficult. It has increased font sizes for certain fonts (Arial, etc.) in certain programs (Internet Eplorer, specifically) and it won't allow me to access the Microsoft Support site OR Windows Update. This is what I get for following what they told me to do in the Help Topics for IE. I will kill this computer if it pushes me overo nce more.

Also, I was up until 7 AM trying to fix a problem with my computer. Turns out it was a Spool program malfuntion, and it cannot print selected pages in Microsoft Word. At least that pushed me to put all of my information on Floppies and CD-RWs for the impending crash.

Seriously, it's gonna crash soon, I know it. I hate this piece of garbage.

But otherwise the writing process is doing well. I hope to be done with it on time!

So, is your computer cooperationg yet?

Is your story almost done yet?

LOL.


My computer is not cooperating, but it's being good enough so I can work. I forgot to update on that, sorry. :P

My work is going O.K. As soon as I wrap up what I am doing with now I'll be done with the first 3 Chapters indefinitely. This isn't fun, because there are a million ways to interpret this scene, and I don't want you, the reader, to get the wrong impression. I may just have to omit that scene and replace it with another. Again.

As you can see, I have found many flaws in my original writings for my novel.

But I should be done my Christmas. Getting it copyrighted will take some time, and I don't know how much time. If anyone knows...

After that I have to look for a publisher who will take the book. That may take a long time. Then they who chooses it will publish it. I don't know how long that will take.

You might not expect it on shelves until late next year. :-\

But you can always just send me a copy of it before then...:D

...if I somehow manage to get a copy of it beforehand. :D

Well you have a copy saved on your computer...so you could randomly just send me a copy of that...:D

Well, I don't think I could give a free copy of it to everybody. ::] I mean, if I give to people for free, who will be supporting my cause? :D

Shh...no one has to know...plus I would buy it when it eventually got released anyways so :P I would be supporting you.

Mmmmbleh. :P Refigerator. :P

Hmmm...

So, you best send me a copy...NOW!!!!!

or later...or never...or I'll just buy it...or maybe a won't...or maybe I'll boycott it...or maybe I'll promote it...or maybe I'll run away and totally forget about it..or maybe I won't do any of that.

:PRefrigerator:P

Hmmm... is your head in the freezer or what? :D ;)


I need time not writing my book to think about it. I mean, jeesh, all I do recently is work on my book and talk to people online. :P

Well jeesh go do something else, you don't have to talk to people online or write your book, you could compltely put off writing your book for years.

??? :-\


What I meant is Ineed to finish my book before I can think about all that.

LOL, I know

You worry me sometimes. ::] ;)


ACK! The blockage must be worked through. This scene needs MAJOR revision and I don't know what to make it out to be.

Maybe you should go to bed and let the blockage pass over night.

I got up just before 4 P.M. I've only been up eight hours. I'll probably try more for another hour or so, but I'll be fine. :)

Ok, as long as you don't burn yourself out, you need to sleep!:D

Yeah, I know. I usually get to bed around 5 AM and get up in the late afternoon, but I'm trying to knock my schedule back a LOT. I don't want to be up too late anymore. :D I don't mind 1 or 2 AM, but not 5 AM every day.


I'm trying not to burn out. I'm good at that. I don't work ALL the time, I often stop and talk to people to clear my head. It's doing well so far. :) I'll probably have an idea overnight and hit it hard tomorrow. ;D

It would definately be healthy to knock your schedule back. I hope you get some good idea's over night.

Thank you, and you're right. Hehe :P

Your book won't finish itself...YOU MUST WORK

I know! I just can't seem to focus.

I'm sorry...try harder

so Disciple, did you ever get a chance for your step-mom to look at it? or is that still forthcoming?

so Disciple, did you ever get a chance for your step-mom to look at it? or is that still forthcoming?
Still forthcoming. I look forward to it. I hope that I'll at least have the fourth chapter done by the time she gets here (this Saturday). ::] Currently I am rewriting it. I changed the story in chapter three, which effects the rest of the book. That, and chapter four solidly sucked. :P So I am trying to develop a story for CH IV. Sadly, it is taking time to develop it word-by-word. I mean, the entire fourth chapter was changed other than the Dream at the beginning.

ok, cool. :) 'cause i was gonna offer to edit it if your step-mom couldn't or whatever. i mean, i'd like to see a finished copy and i have experience editing for the school newspaper (bona fide Copy Editor ;)). but you seem to have it covered.

ok, cool. :) 'cause i was gonna offer to edit it if your step-mom couldn't or whatever. i mean, i'd like to see a finished copy and i have experience editing for the school newspaper (bona fide Copy Editor ;)). but you seem to have it covered.
*chuckles* YEah, handled. ::] Some days, like today, I only manage writing two sentences after spending hours in front of it. But I'll be ok. She said that since she's here for a long time, I have leeway. *needs to get it done* I can't wait till other people read it. My Dad said that the first 3 chaoters and the Prologue are excellent.

Does anyone happen to know how long it takes for copyrighting, then, per sé, publishing? 'Cause I wanna give you guys a ballpark...

^That question is still out there.


I'll say this: I just finished the first draft of this novel yesterday. Though my editing work on Chapters III and IV were clearly rushed and horrid, I was in a hurry to finish before my Mom had to leave (she left today). But overall I am happy that I don't have to work on it for a little while. Perhaps if I feel like it I'll take a look at Chapters III and IV today. If I feel like it.

As of about now it's being proof'd (proofread) in Oklahoma. [Yes, I made the abbreviation myself, so tease away. I know, we live in an abbreviated world but I just did it without thinking, okay? ::]] When it is done being edited/proof'd I'll read through it and see if anything critical is wrong with it, and then I'll get it copyrighted. THEN I'll feel free to let anyone read it. ;D

<EDIT:>
My biggest flaws in writing have to do with the "I" point of view. That is, I don't know when to start and when to stop. So, I almost never use it in my writing as a result, because I fear overusing it. As a result, it's full of a hefty amount of pronouns.

Thus, I don't know how to operate thought processes in the novel. I haven't been taught it, and I can't find a place to learn it until I go to college.

My other flaw is definitely a funny one, but annoying also. ::] I, in the beginning of a few chapters, accidentally repeat a word (with a different one between), and, as in Chapter III, sometimes more than once.

Also, I didn't look closely enough at Chapter III to correct some plot-story-character relation flaws. ::]

So, though I may sound to you guys as if I'm on the brink of finishing it (as in within the month), it might not be until after Spring Break that I actually finish it 100%. Then comes copyrighting and publishing...

you're still a lot farther along than you were. it's getting there. slowly but surely. :D can't wait to see your book on the shelf at work. ;)

you're still a lot farther along than you were. it's getting there. slowly but surely. :D can't wait to see your book on the shelf at work. ;)
*laughs* yes, that would be awesome... and yes, I am. My book won't be coming back edited until Spring Break, so I have time to get a job (and thus, a new computer.)

I'm working hard at developing characters in my mind (some that already exist, too). My first three novels might end up sounding sort-of empty, but I hope to fix that gap. I have plenty I could say, but I'll retain my babble-spout for now. :P

All I have to do is wait now. I'll be getting a job by next week (I hope) since I know what job it is and the place of work is only a block from here. It's not a special job (janitorial at the local Nursing Home) but it pays better than nothing, and I need a new computer for college, though I'll be getting a used one. But I certainly hope I can find the best publisher for me...