Rathe
04-20-2007, 11:21 AM
I wrote this poem off the top of my head a little while ago, it's called 'Dragons Doom':


In shadows dark and dungeons deep,
The darkness lulls your soul to sleep,
Upon the bed of suffering,
You lie and in anguish weep,

The sword to slay the dragon lays,
In cold dead hand decayed by age,
Within’ the tower beyond castle walls,
Your tears run down your beauty falls…

The rider comes with urgent haste,
To slay the dragon, and its fire taste,
With shield on arm and sword in hand,
Of dragons, he swears, to rid the land,

Within’ the tower the maiden waits,
To see her hero ride through the gates,
But within’ the darkness the shadow sleeps,
Keeping watch over the castle it keeps,

Upon the back of his steed he rides,
A hero born to pierce dragon hide,
To free the maiden of her captive tower,
And smother her in loves sweet shower,

The dragon wakes to the rider at the gates,
And it swears his doom awaits’,
But brave hero holds his ground,
Neither his strength nor will would shake,

The maiden watches as battle unfolds,
The warriors ground, still he holds,
And evil dragon falls to hero’s blade,
Now beautiful maiden finally is saved,

So true, is the love they now share,
Intertwined are their hearts so fair,
After so many warriors that had come and died there,
A hero came to rescue maiden fair.

The Lamma
04-20-2007, 02:43 PM
Great poem. :) I like its rhythm and beat, except that some of the lines need some fixed timing. But good job, I love how you took such a classic storyline and put it into a poem! Its a love/adventure poem. :P

V-Ball Queen 32
04-20-2007, 03:04 PM
Wow. That sounded like Shakespeare! Well, except for the fact that I can actually understand what you're saying:). Keep it up!

The Lamma
04-20-2007, 03:06 PM
Lol. I can't understand Shakespeare, either. :P

aliengurl7
04-20-2007, 06:13 PM
That's a really good poem. I like it a lot. :afro:

I Bite
04-21-2007, 11:12 AM
why do dragons always have to be evil?!?
what if the dragon just wanted some company?!?

ok, i'm done...I really like your poem, despite the "evilness" of the dragon.

The Lamma
04-21-2007, 11:27 AM
Why are orcs always evil?

the rocker
04-21-2007, 01:51 PM
props dude. Still awesome.

The Lamma
04-21-2007, 02:43 PM
Props dude whata?

the rocker
04-22-2007, 12:39 PM
What, what? props. :P

The Lamma
04-23-2007, 12:15 PM
props dude. Still awesome.

^Whazzat supposed to mean, I meant.

the rocker
04-23-2007, 12:20 PM
nice job, kudos...ect.

The Lamma
04-23-2007, 12:41 PM
Ok. I'd never heard the term before, obviously. :P Anyways, we should get back on topic...

Geneva
04-24-2007, 04:52 AM
Great poem.

:D

Laerasyn
04-29-2007, 10:09 PM
Yaaaaaaaaaay knights in shining armor!!! *sigh* Ahem, anyways...

Wow- I've never been a huge fan of couplets, but you made that work nicely. I too loved the rhythm and the beat. Your rhyme sounded a bit forced in a few places, but that's about the only CC I can give you, I think... Great example of story-telling through poetry. ;D

PS: If it makes you feel any better about the maltreatment of dragons, Stephani, I've written a poem with a bad dragon and a good one... does that count?

froggie socks.
05-08-2007, 02:43 PM
oooh! i loved it! i'm gonna say something, and don't take it in a bad way, i just think it's funny. when i was reading your poem, i was picturing shrek (how the fudge do you spell that?). but I LOVE YOUR POEM.